What do you think of this story prologue?

As a prologue it is rather long. As a piece of writing it is rather good and I would like to read more to find out what is actually happening. It sounds as though someone is dying although at one point I thought maybe it was someone being born. "A flame of hope bursts through my veins." should that read "flood through" or "rush into" bursting through indicated some sort of injury. It would be helpful to have the prologue give some idea of the story rather than just a descriptive piece of the story. However you can certainly write and a prologue is easier to edit than an entire novel. Good luck with it.